Until now, I still can remember this frightening experience even if it happened in my childhood. One day, I was playing computer games intently. All of a sudden, I saw a girl, who was like my sister, standing by the door. I considered that she just played tricks on me so I didn't care about it. Several hours later, I went downstairs to find my sister but couldn't find her. Afterward, my mother told me that my sister went to the graduation travel for three days and today was the second day. After hearing it, I was so shocked that I couldn't say anything.
I have convinced myself that what I saw was an illusion so I haven't told my mother anything about it. I want to regard it as the most unforgettable momery and keep it in my heart.
整體沒有什麼大問題,只是時態對應部分要注意一下
回覆刪除Afterward, my mother told me that my sister went to the graduation travel for three days and today was the second day.
回覆刪除→today改成that day 會比較好，我覺得因為那是過去的那天，而你是現在寫這篇文章(看不懂可以再問我喲~)
最後一段第一個字"momery"
回覆刪除應該是"memory"唷XD
第一段倒數第四行 but後面可以加一下主詞
回覆刪除然後大致上都OK吧!!
I want to regard it as the most unforgettable momery and keep it in my heart. 感覺怪怪的，want to要不要去掉?
回覆刪除是but I couldn't find her
回覆刪除memory拼錯了
大家都把問題講完了~
回覆刪除文章內容很好^^
went 用完成式喔!
回覆刪除結論句讚喔~!!!