I have been to two great restaurants-Star restaurant and Hello restaurant, and I notice that there are many parts of them are alike. First, both of these two restaurants are in high qualities. Second, Star restaurant's service is as good as the other one. Moreover, the neat and tidy environment of Star restaurant is similar to that of Hello restaurant. Most important of all, Hello restaurant's waiters are really nice and polite.
Likewise, Star restaurant's waiters are great, too! Owing to these outstanding conditions of restaurants, I enjoy the atmosphere there very much when I have meals.
1. I notice that there are many parts of them are alike. (are alike 的are 要刪掉)
回覆刪除2.綺綺~你餐廳的名字是restaurants-star restaurant還是Star restaurant阿?要不要統一一下??
3.likewise 和too 的意思一樣所以只要留一的就好哩!!
字詞用字有進步~轉折詞可再稍微變化一下唷^^
回覆刪除其實你可以舉例說明一下!!
回覆刪除因為這樣會比較多字~~不會跟我一樣簡潔喔!!
而且會覺得說..怎麼沒了!??
and I notice that there are many parts of them are alike. 後面那個are好像要去掉
回覆刪除可以把敘述再加長一點或者再多一些內容會更棒
回覆刪除可以在每一點在舉出一個小例子喔!
回覆刪除這樣文章會看起來更完整~