There are many reasons why I accept this job. First of all, the environment of the workplace is ideal for me: tidy, quiet and simple. Next, one of my good friends also works here; this way, I will not feel lonely because I am a freshman here. Next, the salary is attractive and acceptable. Most important of all, this job is about English translation and I’m major in English. I hope I can familiar myself into work soon!
倒數第二行是I major in就好囉!
回覆刪除familiar沒有動詞用法喔!!
回覆刪除I will not feel lonely because I am a freshman here.(because後面有點不相關，翻起來沒有邏輯性)
還是老話一句，很多論點下面可以多點解釋。
後面要有補充論點喔!
回覆刪除這樣文章比較豐富~
用major in 就好了喔!
this job is about English translation and I’m major in English.
回覆刪除→this job is about English translation and I major in English;therefore I can do it well.
每個點下面再補充一兩句會更好!!
I will not feel lonely because I am a freshman here. 逼扣斯後面啊要不要改成我很怕生或害羞內向不敢主動跟不認識的人講話這樣
回覆刪除多一些補充會更好唷
回覆刪除major當動詞用就ok了