My grandfather was missing in a department store yesterday morning when he went to the bathroom. I had been waiting for him for two hours but he didn't come back. I have looked for him for almost one day. He is too old to recognize the directions so if you see this man in a department store, please inform me as soon as possible.
The man whom I am looking for is called John who is always smile with a big nose. He is about 170 cm and 70 kg or so. Moreover, he has small eyes and wrinkles. When he was missing, he wore a blue shirt and a pair of jeans. In addition, he is bold. The most important of all, he has a big scar on his right cheek, which is easy for you to notice. He is important for me so if you see him, please call me! My phone number is 0977855622. Thank you!
第二段第一行應該是is called喔
回覆刪除(因為不是關代所以要加is)
smile改進行式~
第七行是nose
回覆刪除倒數第四行改成a pair of jeans 比較好
更正第七行應該是mouth!!
回覆刪除第一句阿，當他去廁所時他不見了，好像有點奇怪!?
回覆刪除I have found him for almost one day. (find是找到的意思吧!!所以應該要用look for)
if you see this man in the department store(this 改成the 會比較OK)
who is always smile with a big hose(is..smile 兩個動詞摟!!)
When he missed(應該是when he was missing，因為miss如果動詞的話，好像沒有不見的意思吧)
He is important to me so if you have ever seen him, please call me!(have ever seen 的話，打給你也沒用阿XDD)
不知道是不是 I had been waiting for him ~
回覆刪除應該是He is important for me吧
基本上錯誤不大
回覆刪除只是有個小建議
第四行在看的時候突然看到you會覺得有點怪怪的
不是不對,只是看起來有點突兀
可以選擇改或不改
就看妳了。
開頭the department store
回覆刪除the應該改a因為前面沒交代是哪間百貨
第二段開頭應該是"is" called
smile變smiling才對喔~
是moreover喔!拼錯了~
he was bold.應該變is
因為不會原本禿頭然後變有頭髮吧XD
I have found him for almost one day. 應該要用過去式吧!
回覆刪除hose是要用mouth or nose
When he missed 改 When he was missing 比較沒麼奇怪~
In addition, he was bold. The most important of all, he has a big scar on his right cheek, which is easy for you to notice. 前後時態不一樣,怪怪的~改 he is bold 比較好喔!
I have found him for almost one day. found是找到了所以要不要改成search for 或是 look for
回覆刪除然後其他還蠻通順的
and my grandmother is called Jennifer, would you like to introduce them to each other :D?